Could you do me a favor to give some advice on my writing?

I'm a Chinese student in Beijing,and I find it so helpful to get my writing corrected by native English speakers.


Here's my writing, and I would really appreciate your advice.





One of the main causes, and possibly the most significant one, is the soaring number of cars. Over the past 50 years, there were rather fewer families having enough money to buy a car in China, but now, however, cars have become necessities for average families living in cities, due to the dramatic growth in technology and economy. Consequently, the car ownership constantly increasing and this makes traffic blocked.Could you do me a favor to give some advice on my writing?
Me's answer is the best. Take that advise!Could you do me a favor to give some advice on my writing?
Is this part of your writing or all?


if this is all, you need a good intro!


Also, ';Over the past 50 years, there were rather fewer families having enough money to buy a car in China, but now, however, cars have become necessities for average families living in cities, due to the dramatic growth in technology and economy';


WHOA ROS ALERT(run on sentence) this is kind of long considering this entire thing is like 3 sentences T_T


Otherwise it's really good!
Over the past 50 years, few families in China have had enough money to buy a car. Due to the dramatic growth in technology and economy, cars have become necessities. Consequently, car ownership has resulted in great blocks in traffic.
1) One of the main causes of what?





2) Delete the word ';rather';.





3) Over the past 50 years, there were fewer Chinese familes who had enough money to buy a car than in 2008. This change has resulted partially because cars have become neccessities for average families living in cities, due to dramatic growth in technology and economy. Consequently, car ownership in China is constantly increasing. As a result of the increase in the number of cars being driven, traffic has become more congested in recent years.
YEAH OK
Here is an edited option. What you had was pretty good, but I changed a few verb choices to make it more clear. Hope it helps.





Possibly the most significant cause (of what? Road congestion? Put that here), is the soaring number of cars in use today. Within the past 50 years, far fewer Chinese families have had enough money to buy a car. Today, however, the situation is changing. Cars have become necessities for average families living in cities. This is due to the dramatic growth in technology and an improved economy. Consequently, ever-increasing car ownership is creating greater traffic congestion.

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